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Some people say that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating children until the age of 14 is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The appropriate
age
 to leave school
life
 has been a great matter of debate for some time now. Parents are in dilemma as to when should they take their children out of school- at 18 or 14.In
this
 essay we will discuss both the views of the debate and I will tell why I think the
first
 one is the better option. Almost every year after high school (
that is
 an
age
 14 minimum), parents start to think whether they should continue their
child
's studies or should they drop them.Indeed,
this
 may be a good idea as the
child
 has learnt the basic knowledge to survive. He or she can bow take any standard job and earn a simple living.People who prefer basic
life
 tend to spend less on their
child
's discipline as they think earning a livelihood early in
life
 will make them independent and
also
 they will be a help for the betterment of the family.
This
 is mostly the case with the middle class and joint families who have less earning and more mouths to feed.For them backing out from school at the
age
 of 14 is a good idea, but they can lose out on some big opportunities in
life
 due to lack of proper education.
On the other hand
, well to do families or people who want to achieve greater heights in
life
 tend to opt for higher education and degrees. These students and their guardians have higher aims in their do list. As it's a well known fact that degrees are essential to take up reputed and high level jobs in
this
 world, children happily accept the offer of higher learning and colleges. In my opinion, the debate is clearly won by people who think children should study up to the
age
 of 18 and above. Higher education not only benefits the
child
 and family, but
also
 plays a vital role in the progress of society and in turn contributes to the economy of the country.
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