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More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending a short time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching ore building houses. Why? Who benefits more from this, the community or these young people?

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It is true that an accelerating number of young volunteers are now doing unpaid work to help communities in developing countries.
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 trend can be attributed to some reasons, and both the youngsters and the communities benefit from
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. Several reasons can shed light on why young people from
developed
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developing
 countries spend some time doing voluntary work in communities in poor countries.
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, they gain invaluable experience and develop practical skills which they can, in turn, add to their CVs.
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 experience will certainly help them when landing jobs down the road.
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, the motivation of idealistic youngsters should not be underestimated. The desire to help others less fortunate than themselves comes from a feeling of wanting to give without reward and share hardships, experiencing what it is like to live in a poor
community
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. Both the host
community
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 and the young people can take advantage of these activities. The
community
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 benefits as these young people bring their enthusiasm and knowledge, as well as their physical
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
.
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, the youngster may be able to teach literacy and numeracy skills, or they may be strong and
energetic
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energized
 to help with building houses for those who have inadequate shelter. The young people benefit through the life experience which they gain, living and working alongside those from a different culture. Without exaggeration, it is a life-changing challenge and the youngsters will return to their homes with a much more mature and
broader outlook
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a broader outlook
 on life. In conclusion, there are some clear reasons for
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 volunteering trend and either the
community
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 or the youngsters benefit from
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, it can truly be said to be a win-win situation.
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