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Writing Samples
Band 8

A friend of yours has always admired your car. You have now decided to sell it. Write a letter to your friend to ask if he is interested in buying your car. In your letter, • explain why you are selling your car • describe the good points and any bad points about your car • suggest the friend visits you to see and drive your car

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Dear David, I have decided to sell my car and I remember you being interested in it in the past. We are taking some time off to travel as a family, so we will be buying a caravan which requires a motor vehicle with a bigger towing capacity.I am wondering whether you are still looking to buy a buggy and if mine would suit your needs. My sedan is now seven years old and
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 has a few drawbacks that you should be aware of. First of all, the radio is not adapted to modern standards.I know that you like to listen to electronic and bass music, so
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 may not satisfy you.
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, the seats are visibly damaged in the back, as my kids have sat there most of the time, but
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 is repairable.
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, though the gondola is in excellent condition and I am sure that,
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 the radio, you be pleased with its properties. It drives very well and will get you through the most stressful drive to work or an enjoyable holiday trip with success. Just call me or write back if you would like to know more. I hope to see you soon if you would like to inspect and test drive my automobile! Best wishes, Tom.

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logical structure
Consider a clearer organization of the points regarding the car's condition to enhance logical flow. For instance, group all good points together and then address all the bad points.
coherence
Be mindful of grammatical issues and ensure correct word choices such as 'boot' instead of 'gondola' for a British context, and 'car' instead of 'buggy'.
coherence
Proofread your letter for minor language errors, such as missing words ('you be pleased' should be 'you will be pleased').
task response
You've covered all the essential points required in the prompt: explaining why you're selling the car, describing both good and bad points about the car, and suggesting that your friend visit to see and drive it.
task response
The tone of your letter is informal and friendly, which is appropriate given that you are writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
Your letter has a clear greeting at the beginning and a suitable closing at the end.
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