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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, the issue of whether or not
technology
 and tradition could coexist together has sparked off an intense debate.
Although
 some people claim that traditional cultures must be lost as
technology
 develops, I personally oppose
this
 view and I believe
technology
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the technology
 could be beneficial to the perseverance of tradition. People who think that
technology
 and tradition are incompatible claim that some traditions do go out of fashion.
For
example
, as machines replace manual works, many clothes today are manufactured in production line rather than sewed manually.
Thus
, the sewing techniques as a traditional skill may disappear.
However
, they are oversimplifying the situation. For one thing, preserving traditional
culture
 does not mean refusing changes of any kind. As to the
example
 mentioned before, if people turned back sticking to sewing clothes manually,
this
 would have resulted in
low
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lower
 efficiency and backwards
of
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in
 social development. For another, not everything being lost could be called traditional
culture
. Rather, only those survive through history could be called so.
For
example
, people began to use lamp
instead
 of fire to lighten when Edison invented lamp, but it would be hard-pressed to define lightening by fire as the symbol of traditional
culture
. In others words,
technology
 helps to identify what is the real traditional
culture
. Yet others argue that
technology
 is helpful in preserving traditions
instead
.
To begin
 with, advanced
technology
 provides appropriate preserving conditions.
For instance
, some antiques have to be kept under a certain room temperature and air-conditioning today makes
this
requirement possible
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requirement as possible
.
Moreover
,
technology
 is conducive to broadcasting traditions.
For
example
, few people had the opportunity to appreciate classical music before CD players, cassette and other voice store media came into existence.
In contrast
, these technologies help to publicize classical music and pass down from generation to generation. To conclude, I am convinced that
technology
 is more conducive than harmful to traditional
culture
 perseverance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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