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some people believe that robots are important for humans to develop while others think that it is a dangerous invention that will impact society negatively. Discuss both views and give your opinion

For some time now, it has become a topic of debate where a section of society believes
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 are playing a crucial role in our lives
whereas
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 others argue that it will have an adverse effect
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 the community. In my
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opinion
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, the benefits of
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are outweighed
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 the negative aspects in the twenty-first century. On the one hand, there are some reasons why the robot’s role
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is detrimental
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 to society in the future.
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, some people believe they will be replaced in a job with
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 and the unemployment
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ratio
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 would be increased day by day in the near future.
Due to
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this
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, many other problems may occur like poverty, crime,
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completion
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.
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a recent survey by “Wonder – The survey team”, has published that the giant companies which are affiliated with automobiles are moving their workforce from
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 to machines.
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,
this
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 may influence the
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under
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 more unemployment.
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, people would become dependent if
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 start helping their daily life and
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 may cause health issues like obesity.
On the other hand
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, we cannot be denied the importance of
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 in our lives. It wouldn’t
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 to reach
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Mars without
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robots
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 and
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such
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related
technology
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 which has been used
while
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 reaching out of the
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. Nowadays,
robots
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 are being used in the health sector
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 doing critical surgeries, which plays a vital role in our community.
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, it reduces errors
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improve
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 product quality and production in large companies.
Robot
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has
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 taken the place of
the
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human
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humans
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 in information and
technology
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 as well and they provide accurate information like repetitive question’s
answer
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answers
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 tirelessly.
In addition
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, automation
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 has been influenced by robotic
technology
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 and you can find it at
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airports
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 or well-versed railway stations where you can ask questions to
robots
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 for relevant information and get up-to-date answers which have been set up with
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automation tools. In conclusion,
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 advent of
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 in
this
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 fast-paced life, there are convenient arguments by people against
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, they have to accept
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 trend and
robots
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 will be more beneficial to our society.

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coherence cohesion
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Make sure to address all parts of the task question and provide a well-rounded response including both views and your opinion.
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