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The two maps illustrates the changes of a school campus from 1985 to 2012

The two maps illustrates the changes of a school campus from 1985 to 2012
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The two maps compare the scale of
a
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campus as it was in the years 1985 and 2012.
It is clear that
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 the main change for 2012 included the addition of
new
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 site.
Furthermore
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, the school became able to accommodate more students. Compared to the map in 1985, in 2012, there was an increase in the number of pupils attending the school, at 2300. A notable change was the reform of the shape of
big
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the big
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 car park
in
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 the top of the map, from
rectangle
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 to be semicircle. In the classroom block was placed in the east,there was
also
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 one more storey so there are total
3
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storeys. Between 1985 and 2012, a small car park was demolished and
the
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trees were planted on
this
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 site,
while
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 the library was replaced by the resource
for
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computer
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the computer
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 room.
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, in the south of the map, there was a striking change
that
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 the playing field was contracted in order to construct two classrooms buildings and the building involving
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool and fitness club.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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