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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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The issue of whether rich countries should support food and education in poor countries is complex. While some people are standing for it, others believe that it should be the responsibility of their local governments.
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, I feel that the developed nations should help less
developing
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developed
 nations, and I will explain the reasons here.
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, it seems simplistic to say that every country should be able to provide the basics for its citizens.
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 as nutrition and education.
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, many poor countries, especially in Africa, have more existential threats,
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 as drought, civil wars, and outbreaks of diseases, and they do not have the resources to feed their people.
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, it is
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 a fact that we – as human beings – should show solidarity and help impoverished people in poor countries.
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, affluent countries can donate food to countries that suffer from drought and famine.
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, by providing the proper education and training to people in poor countries, we not only help them to have a better future and to build their economy but
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 avoid illegal immigration. Of course, those who say that giving money to poor countries will be a burden on taxpayers in wealthy countries, are quite correct; but it is equally true, though, that it will improve the safety of the developed nations by making poor states more economically stable. In conclusion, I would not wish to underestimate the fact that the authorities in poor countries should be responsible for providing adequate living standards
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, rich countries should have a moral responsibility toward helping people in need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • global stability
  • economic self-sufficiency
  • sustainable development
  • capacity-building
  • foreign aid
  • mutual benefits
  • trade relations
  • long-term outcomes
  • dependency
  • moral obligation
  • alleviate poverty
  • humanitarian assistance
  • resource allocation
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