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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a view from some people that teenage
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 is the happiest
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 in their
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however others
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however, others
 think that mature
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 is a most enjoyable
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 of
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 essay I will discuss both the view and I will give my personal support to the formal view with some arguments. On the one hand, those who believe that adult
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 is the most joyful
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 period they may argue that in
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 of
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 individuals will enter into maturity and responsible character. It makes people more respectful in the family and other members in the family start important discussions with them.
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, a father in the family decides to buy a house, since it is an important decision, a father will be concerned with a mature son or daughter.
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, in the adult
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, those who get married, they start their new journey in their
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 and after that child and wife/husband will bring new excitement in their
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 and give them unforgettable moments.
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, I think that teenage
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 is the best
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 of
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 for many people. In
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 often people become more enthusiastic and energetic. They are ready to do or take any kind of risk and adventure which gives them pleasure.
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, at the
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 of 18 years, many students do fast biking races which could be dangerous, but they do
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 for the extra level of happiness and enjoyment.
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 kind of event makes
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 span of the
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 most important and considered as the happiest
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 ever they had. In conclusion,
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, adult
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 is quite enjoyable due to family, children and simultaneously responsible character, it is my belief that adolescence is an unforgettable
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 of
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 due to many happy and craziest moments we lived during that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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