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These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom reaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages?

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We live in an age when a great number of people prefer e-learning as well as teaching.
However many
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However, many
 other thinkers consider that all drawbacks are combined with online education. While virtual education offers many benefits, I think it has other crucial sides.
Firstly
, let us take a look at advantageous part. As many of us predict, day by day the latest technologies have been coming and importing so much opportunities to our lives. Meanwhile, a big part of them occupied a lot of fields and especially being used in the educational process in
this
 lockdown period. Another point worth noting is, e-education saves our time, money and other possessions, with
this
 way it serves us. My own view on the matter is offline teaching or lectures cannot be attractive
also
 efficient anymore as it was monopoly a decade ago.
In addition
, a new growing generation has already got used to acquire knowledge through the Internet.
Secondly
, People want to save their time,
money according
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money, according
 to
this
 the internet-offered tutorials are the best option and a chance for them especially for solitary and aggressive candidates.
Furthermore
, research has found that coming to 2050 year absolute education system will be automated
moreover in
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moreover, in
 most of the country's institutions, schools will have been devastated and the notions of going to school, school bullying or prom will not be mentioned by any people. If it really happens and affects to reality, a few professions disappear from our lives. To sum up, the beneficial sides of turning to online teaching can easily outweigh the disadvantages and I deduce that all peoples' thoughts about following idea will be positive.
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