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In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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As a consequence of
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 pollution and other negative factors over the
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 centuries, that have been taking an impact on the vitality of our globe, it will be difficult to live on the earth in the future. While it is believed by some that we ought to invest funds in exploring another
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 to live, like Mars, I would argue that we should not spend money on it.
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 with, it is clearly seen that life is not as simple as it was before. The main reason is the
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 pollution and water contamination that essentially affect living throughout the world. The increasing of construction of many plants or factories on the land with the abundance of natural resources,
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 as gas, oil, and uranium has caused the tremendous volume of carbon emissions discharged into the atmosphere, that aggravates
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 and accelerate global warming.
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, lots of people are suffering from diseases like bronchitis or asthma, many natural catastrophes are being occurred like storms, tsunami
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 human being's life is put in danger. Notwithstanding, I do not think that spending money on finding new
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 for all creations is beneficial criterion. Because there is no
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 as the earth that has a favourable environment for living, but the outlay might be dramatically colossal.
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, humans should invest their money on mending environmental conditions and encourage people to live a tolerant lifestyle caring about nature.
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, planting many trees all around, using public transport or transport that does not produce exhaust gases. These kind of living will cut exhaust emissions to the
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 and reduce negative affect on the nature, making the earth a more wonderful place for living. In conclusion, even if global warming is increasing, I think
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 of researching another
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 for living, it is more reasonable to improve the land we all live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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