IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #cars #travel #city #bicycle
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Although
Linking Words
, it is sometimes thought car is the best mode of transportation in a city, other people believe that
bicycle
Use synonyms
 is best. In my opinion, deciding whether the mode should be a car or
bicycle
Use synonyms
 depends on the
distance
Use synonyms
. On the one hand, travelling in a car is very convenient for people.
In other words
Linking Words
, cars provide various facilities
such
Linking Words
 as, ease, convenience, and comfort, for which the people looks, especially, elderly ones.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, it is fast and
also
Linking Words
 helps the people to cover a long
distance
Use synonyms
 area within a short period of time.
Additionally
Linking Words
, it places a vital role in case of emergencies.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, it is often thought that it is better to use
Use synonyms
bicycle
Suggestion
bicycles
 as it places a crucial role in the environment. Bicycles are eco-friendly, as it does not release any hazardous gas which causes air pollution.
Hence
Linking Words
, not harming the environment or any living being on the planet. Another reason is, it is one of the effective ways to maintain a person's health,
for example
Linking Words
, it is very useful for people who are having related problem or obesity to do exercise.
Finally
Linking Words
, in my view, both cars and bicycles have its own benefit, for people, but people should opt based on the
distance
Use synonyms
. While for a short
distance
Use synonyms
bicycle
Use synonyms
 should ne used for travelling as it is healthy for both humans and the environment, for long
distance
Use synonyms
, cars should be used as it is a time saving option.
Therefore
Linking Words
, people should be flexible based on their necessities. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe it would be better using
Use synonyms
bicycle
Suggestion
bicycles
 for a few kilometres and cars for a longer
distance
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by mansiichauhan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: