Crime & Punishment Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is sometimes argued that the punishments of a
crime
should not change for a known
crime
, and the penalties should remain stable for each type of
crime
,
however
, many
people
say
this
cannot be true and we should consider the motivation
,
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and the situation of
criminals
. I believe that instituting a single
punishment
for each type of
crime
would be a dogmatic and one-dimensional view towards
criminals
. On the one hand, some
people
claim that
crime
is a
crime
and we cannot alleviate the obscenity related to crimes with criminal circumstances and situations;
for instance
, you cannot make an excuse for murdering someone.
Also
, if we have a restricted
punishment
for each guilt,
people
will understand the consequences of their acts, and they try to behave better.
For example
, some murderers claim that it was instant madness that forced them to kill someone;
thus
, they could run away from
punishment
. At the same time, it would be much easier for lawyers and courts to set the rules against crimes.
While
I understand it could be easier to regulate a single penalty for each type of misbehavin, In my point of view, it cannot be a good attitude towards
this
issue at all.
On the other hand
, other
people
believe we should consider the motivation, and
also
the criminal's situation. We should ask why they put their life in danger when they know about the consequences. The first and most important notion towards
this
idea is that many
people
commit crimes in diverse situations.
For example
, I remember when I lost my conscious because of my disease, my father passed many red lights to send me to the hospital.
Secondly
, humans can make mistakes and we cannot blame them; you can forget your driving license. If it's your first time, the government could forgive you, but if it happens frequently, the rules behave you differently.
Lastly
, penalties should fit the level of the economy of citizens.
for instance
, if the police charge the drivers for their speed with a couple of dollars, many wealthy
people
tend to go at high speed and refuse to stick with the law. In conclusion,
people
's attitudes towards setting punishments for
criminals
vary. I believe when governments want to punish someone, they should consider the circumstances and motivation of
criminals
, and
then
they set the proper
punishment
for them.
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Provide a clearer stance earlier in the introduction. It currently takes a bit too long to discern the writer's position.
coherence cohesion
Use linking devices and transition words more effectively to improve the flow between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition of ideas and ensure that each main point introduces a new perspective or example to strengthen the argument.
task achievement
The essay effectively addresses both views on the topic, offering a balanced discussion.
task achievement
Relevant examples are provided to illustrate points, making the argument more convincing and relatable.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present, providing a clear start and finish to the essay.

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