Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?
It is considered by some that social networking sites help
people
to get in contact with each other as well as
with the news. In my opinion, I think social media
can bring about more problems for people
compared to any advantages it might bring.
Admittedly, there are some benefits to the people
from using social networking platforms. Firstly
, it helps people
to be in contact who stays
far away, especially, Verb problem
live
someone
who lives in another country or who are
not able to meet each other very frequently, can talk with each other through any social Correct subject-verb agreement
is
media
platform. Furthermore
, there is
some relatives or close Correct subject-verb agreement
are
friend
who are not able to attend special one’s celebrations or events physically, Fix the agreement mistake
friends
can
be present virtually, Correct word choice
and can
for example
, video
call. Change preposition
via video
Secondly
, social media
helps the
Correct article usage
apply
people
to read news from all around the world from anywhere. In other words
, some people
who are not able to get enough time to read the newspaper,
can use Remove the comma
apply
this
platform for reading news anytime they are free.
Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe people
could face serious drawbacks from social media
. One potentially dangerous is cyber bullying which is increasing, particularly, in teenagers. In other words
, some people
imitate someone
else or victims’ friend
and trick them into getting all the information about them or Fix the agreement mistake
friends
someone
else as much as possible. This
information is then
used for harassing
the victim and Change preposition
to harass
taking
money from them, Wrong verb form
take
moreover
, there are some weak people
who are not able to handle this
,
Correct word choice
and, consequently
consequently
, commit suicide. Another obvious issue is that someone
can misuse the photo
which are posted on an individual’s account. Fix the agreement mistake
photos
This
can again result in harassment or exposing those pictures after editing them, as there is
various editing Correct subject-verb agreement
are
platform
available for free nowadays.
In conclusion, misusing Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
someone
’s private information and harassing people
far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from social media
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task response
Ensure to fully address the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of social media. Include more specific examples to support your points.
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