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homework: Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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In the modern day, the majority of people try to earn more and more
money
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. Some people consider that earning more
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 and having less free
time
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 is normal, but others think that earning less
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 and having more free
time
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 is better. In
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 essay I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, having more cash is important for big families.
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, there are four children in the family, all of them need clothes, food and shoes, so that their parents ought to
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 more.
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, the majority of teenagers need capital for their future education, so that people star
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 harder to earn
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 for their children.
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, people need free
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 for their hobbies.
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, workers can go to the meetings with their friends after job.
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, all workers need
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 to relax.
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, people should not
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 all the
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, as they will stop caring about
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. In my opinion, it depends on people. If someone like their job, they do not need free
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. If people feel tired, they need
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 to relax. In conclusion, there are a lot of reasons why people should
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 more and more;
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, there are
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 a lot of drawbacks.
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