To continue rise in the worlds population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the presentataion. What are the courses of this continue rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Earth is the planet with enormous diversity and all the living creatures living on it.Nowadays
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worlds
population
is continuosly rise
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is continuously rising
is continuously rise
has continuously risen
continuously rises
with time.Presently
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we see that human faces
plathora
extreme excess
plethora
of complications due to uncontrolled
population
and it is not only our country
problem but
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problem, but
this
is complicated issue
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is a complicated issue
for all the high populated countries. To come out from
this
miserable condition
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we need to understand the major cause of
this
high rise of
population
.
Firstly
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illiteracy is
major cause
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a major cause
the major cause
of high
population
.
For instance
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if we saw the developed countries where literacy level is very high
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they understand the worst effects of
big family
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a big family
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
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lack of knowledge is the significant reason
of
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for
uncontrolled birth rate
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uncontrolled birth rates
the uncontrolled birth rate
.
Secondly
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poverty
also play
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also plays
vital role
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a vital role
to increase the
population
.Poor people cannot afford adequate education
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Due to unawareness
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,
they
elevated
(of pain or sorrow) made easier to bear
alleviated
this
problem for humans.
Thirdly and
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Thirdly, and
lastly
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,
some culture and government
also
responsible for
such
situation.
For instance
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,
in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
particular culture some conservative leaders gave wrong
campained
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigned
against the use of birth
controll
power to direct or determine
control
precautions. I strongly believe that from
lot
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a lot
of issues
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,
rise of
population
is relatively major problem faced by present humanity.
Asthetics
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Aesthetics
of earth is their environment and nature and it all
deminished
impaired by diminution
diminished
if our
population
should not
been
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be
controll
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controlled
control
controls
and over
population
is never be a fruitful our future.
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