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The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Since the technology
has came
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has come
 into existence,
News
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the News
has became
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has become
 one of the essential source of
information
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 for the people.
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, News are being delivered to us by the
journalists
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journalists, although
although
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, there has been many cases of delivering misleading news in terms of responsibilities and ethics.
This
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 essay will discuss a brief argument on the journalists how
trust-worthy
worthy of trust or belief
trustworthy
 they are? Let's move forward, every
journalist
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 wants to get featured in broadcasting medium and wants to top. Sometimes they tend to broadcasts unethical piece of
information
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 from their sources. There have been journalists who does not have related knowledge in the field and try to twist it in their own words which can change the whole meaning, especially, in
this
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 tech
savy
get the meaning of something
savvy
 world.
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, a research from
oxford
a university town in northern Mississippi; home of William Faulkner
Oxford
 university has suggested that 32% of
journalist
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 provides misleading
information
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 to boost their article.
On the other hand
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, In the ear of Technology a startup news
channels
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channel
 who has limited funds tend to hire
local
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local journalists
a local journalist
journalist
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 from respective field and pressurize them to cover the topics which are not in favour. That results in misleading and unrelated
information
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 to the mass audience.
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, A political
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journalist featuring
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journalist, featuring
 their article of a new
Iphone
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iPhone
IPhone
 released with all
specification
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specifications
 and features just to be ahead in
race
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the race
.
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, it creates a trust issue towards the company as well as articles which are published by a
journalist
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. To sum up, The news
are meant
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is meant
 to be
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first priority source
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a first priority source
the first priority source
 of
information
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 to the mass
audience especially,
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audience, especially
 in a gadget
world but
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world, but
 due to new startups of news channel and
journalist
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 who lack knowledge can create a trust
issues
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issue
 and can be
a
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an
 unethical for the audience.
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