public libraries are no longer important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays
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Nowadays
,
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,
young people prefer to use
internet
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the internet
to read books
,
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,
magazines and journals
.
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however i
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However, I
however I
However I
However i
strongly disagree because reading paper materials in
library
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the library
libraries
is more interesting because in that
place
there are many users who can motivate others.
firstly
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Firstly
,
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,
reading books in libraries more necessary than
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
due to people can read how much they want and find more interesting subjects there
.
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for
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For
example
,
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,
people who visit libraries often say that it is more interesting to read books with other readers because you can share some
informations
a message received and understood
information
and analyse some facts that you had read
.
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so
to a very great extent or degree
So
when people something they have
problem
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a problem
to understand fully so they may have questions after their reading
,
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,
libraries are the best
place
because it is full of
fanats
any creature of exceptional size
giants
fanatics
footnotes
of reading books.
secondly
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Secondly
,
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reading books using the internet may prolong some days or some months than people
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their potential to read books
.
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.
nevertheless people
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Nevertheless, people
Nevertheless people
who visit libraries continues their visits to those
plases
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
places
because reading books in that atmosphere may cause more interest
.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
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people who see others potential may try
toread
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to read
more and get more knowledge.
furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
Furthemore
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also brings
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also bring
interest to read books
,
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,
magazines in that
place
as talking and analysing
such
people favourite thing.
meanwhile
at the same time but in another place
Meanwhile
,
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others may disagree and say that can do by using the internet analyse with others
.
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but
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But
in
such
case readers do not feel how it is
un
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a
an
on
beliavable interesting
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believable, interesting
believable interesting
face to face discussions in
atmosphere
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an atmosphere
full of reading materials and readers
in
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In
conclusion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think reading books in libraries more interesting than other
place
because people there can read anything and how much they want
.
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.
furthemore they
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Furthermore, they
Furthermore they
furthermore they
can analyse with
oter
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
readers which
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readers, which
may increase interest to read books.
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