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Nowadays, many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of life. However, only a few achieve it. What are the problems in doing this and also mention the solutions to this?

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There is a tendency that these
days several people
Suggestion
days, several people
 are struggling to keep stability between
work
 and personal
life
. In
this
 essay, I will propose some of the possible motives for
this
 phenomenon and
also
 suggest ways to handle
this
 issue. Sometimes
work
 dominates social and family
life
. One of the reasons is that some employees can not separate their
work
 from their family. That happens because they increase their
work
 hours.
Although
 they are at home, they still
work
 on their computers, answering
work
 calls, or having visitors from
work
. Another reason has kids. If both parents
work
,
then
 they have a baby, someone should quit from
work
 to take care of the baby, which will severely affect their income where their family grows. Set boundaries between
work
 and personal
life
 help to aim equilibrium.
For example
, have friends from out of the
work
 circle, who have common interests, will help to reduce
work
 stress and add refreshment to
life
.
Also
, having different email will help to avoid any contact with
work
 while the people at home when Mothers and fathers have a child that should not stop them. Governments give one of the parents
work
 off for an extended period to give them a chance to take care of their
child
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children
.
For example
, in the UK, a new mother can take a paid maternity leave of up to 56 weeks.
Then
 they can use daycare when they back to
work
. In conclusion, It is possible to achieve a balance between
work
 and personal
life
 by following some procedures, and with the assistance of governments and employers.
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