Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

Obesity is a tough problem
spread especially
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spread, especially
in the most
developped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
countries like US, Europe and
also
in Italy. The main consequence is the development of different medical problems like strokes,
diabete
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
,
ipertension
a common disorder in which blood pressure remains abnormally high (a reading of 140/90 mm Hg or greater)
hypertension
,
therefore from
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therefore, from
the economical point of view obesity has a strong impact causing a sharp hike of
healthcare
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health care
cost. The aim of
this
essay is to assess the possibility to reduce the number of overweight people banning all fast
food
advertising. I partially agree with
this
statement because it would be surely useful but not enough. In
this
way children
can not
can not
cannot
have the access to images that represent appetizing and tempting fat
food
, sugar and salty items, fried servings with sauces.
Although
banning repetitive
advertisiments
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisements
advertisement
can be a solution, it is not enough as other efforts are required.
Firstly
to raise awareness about
healthcare
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health care
risks, through mass media information, could be a crucial
step especially
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step, especially
to younger people in order to shape their
mind
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minds
about a right alimentary
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Since children are the most vulnerable category, it is evident how parents and school should play a fundamental role to give them suggestions to follow a healthy diet.
Furthermore schools
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Furthermore, schools
could implement practical initiatives like eliminating unhealthy
food
in vending machines, inviting nutritional experts to take seminars, aimed to educate children about a correct
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. In
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
can be seen that banning fast
food
advertisement can give just a partial contribution to fight obesity. Valid alternatives have
bben
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
identified in limiting the advertising on
internet
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the internet
, making younger people aware of possible
healthcare
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health care
risks and implementing educational practical initiatives. The role of the family can be
also
considered crucial to the
children
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child's
children's
education about alimentation.
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