Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

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Obesity is a tough problem

spread especially

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spread, especially

in the most

developped

being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful

developed

countries like US, Europe and

also

in Italy. The main consequence is the development of different medical problems like strokes,

diabete

a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst

diabetes

ipertension

a common disorder in which blood pressure remains abnormally high (a reading of 140/90 mm Hg or greater)

hypertension

therefore from

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therefore, from

the economical point of view obesity has a strong impact causing a sharp hike of

healthcare

Suggestion

health care

cost. The aim of

this

essay is to assess the possibility to reduce the number of overweight people banning all fast

food

advertising. I partially agree with

this

statement because it would be surely useful but not enough. In

this

way children

can not

cannot

have the access to images that represent appetizing and tempting fat

food

, sugar and salty items, fried servings with sauces.

Although

banning repetitive

advertisiments

a public promotion of some product or service

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays people are trying to have a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems could this create? How can people overcome them?

Discuss the causes of rising unemployment in some regions or countries and the potential effects of them on society.

In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

Work is being done on the street where you live. The noise is disturbing you. Write a letter of complaint to your local council. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Explain what the problems is •Suggest solutions to the problem You do not need to write any addresses