Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

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Obesity is a tough problem

spread especially

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spread, especially

in the most

developped

being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful

developed

countries like US, Europe and

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in Italy. The main consequence is the development of different medical problems like strokes,

diabete

a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst

diabetes

ipertension

a common disorder in which blood pressure remains abnormally high (a reading of 140/90 mm Hg or greater)

hypertension

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therefore from

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therefore, from

the economical point of view obesity has a strong impact causing a sharp hike of

healthcare

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health care

cost. The aim of

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essay is to assess the possibility to reduce the number of overweight people banning all fast

food

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advertising. I partially agree with

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statement because it would be surely useful but not enough. In

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way children

can not

cannot

have the access to images that represent appetizing and tempting fat

food

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, sugar and salty items, fried servings with sauces.

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banning repetitive

advertisiments

a public promotion of some product or service

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

279 words

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Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

Fully explain your ideas

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be diverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweighs the disadvantage.

In some countries, it is illegal for componies to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negative development?

Your next-door neighbor likes to listen to music late at night. Because of the loud music, you often lose sleep. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter describe the situation explain the problems it is causing you offer at least one solution

Computers these days can translate all kinds of language with great accuracy. Hence, our children will not need to learn more languages in the future. Do you agree or disagree?