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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend?

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Technology is a term which is being widely used in almost every sector of our life. Currently we are witnessing an outburst of technological inventions, each and every day new inventions are being introduced in
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 sector.
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 of
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 our traditional job pattern has been changed. Multinational companies are encouraging its employees to
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 from
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, with the advent of technology everything can be done through the internet. Like every technology it
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 has advantages and disadvantages. When we speak about advantages,
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 think it's better to start with convenience factor. It is very helpful for women employees who has the responsibility to take care of their kids especially toddlers. They can easily manage both of their
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 easily.
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, when people
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, they feel more relaxed as compared to their office. Everyone is more comfortable in their
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 conditions, so they do not feel that much pressure.
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 offers flexibility, staff can do their
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 any time of their preference. They do not need to circle around their office table the whole day.
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, there are
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 some disadvantages too.
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, sometimes they don't really feel they are working when they sit their
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 and does their duties. Eventually people may lose their concentration and that will reflect in their
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 negatively.
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for some jobs like marketing it can not be possible, employees who
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 in
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 field need to go to the customers and talk to them about the business.
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, punctuality is the one of the main characteristics of an employee. So a fixed schedule of
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 should be followed,
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 only possible when they are at
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. To recapitulate,
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 from
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 is a life changing concept. But it cannot be applied in all the cases. Whether it is good or bad for the employees is still a controversial issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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