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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that in some countries, foreign visitors are required to pay
more higher
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higher
 fees for cultural and historical sites.
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 it is beneficial for many countries, I only partly agree since the extra amount should be limited to a certain degree depending on different authorization. There are many reasons why foreign tourists need to pay more, and the most important of which is the benefits for the local authorities. Because tourism is a key industry
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in
 some countries, it will become a burden for the locals if the quality of national monuments is affected negatively by a significant increase in peak seasons.
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 leads to extra amount for the maintenance and renovation of these sites. To be more precise, the government should identify where the costs come from and match it with the revenue or the number of tickets sold in order to prevent charging citizens’ pockets.
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, it encourages local citizens, especially the young generations to explore their motherland’s history and culture.
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, there are several regulations that the government can implement.
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, the heavy fines would be equal to both foreign and local visitors to discourage the destructive
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 measure would be the reductions for foreigners in low season to retain the customers for local businesses.
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, the extra payment should not exceed the
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price
 ceiling or below the price floor imposed by the national or local administration. Because there are a considerable number of tourist attractions under private ownership, it would be better to establish general rules to restrict either excess supply or excess demand. In conclusion, while it is better for countries to set
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higher
 prices for foreigners, there are still various measures to restrain the fee.
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