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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children?

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In the contemporary era, younger generation wants to lead a happy activity by avoiding children. Some people believe that it is a wise decision while others opine that it has many drawbacks. In
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 and foremost, kids are barriers for career growth. What I mean by, when you start thinking about children after marriage, one has to sacrifice their carrier in order to bring them into the earth.
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, the maintenance of the childhood has grown potentially. Parents have to bear the children's expenses and responsibility until they grow a certain age. They should be in a position to accept the kids.
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, they lose their jobs during pregnancy, which leads them to put in financial burdens.
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, there is a plethora of advantages of having a child. In old ages, elders tend to say that no kids means no
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. Living without infants is not possible for some parents as they feel like it is sedentary lifestyle few years after their marriage
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 Having a Childrens means you can always enjoy happily
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 and you will never feel lonely when they are around you. If you start enjoying with the kids, one can forget their burdens which may arise in their
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 and energize themselves. As they grow, you will have a hope in the future that they will support you in all the time and when you become old, they can be your strong support of
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 during retirement period.
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, when the kids, marriage, you can cherish your moments with their kids. In conclusion, it is an individual mindset to have kids or not.
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, it has both pros and cons. People have to decide based on their circumstance in their
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. It is a boon for some people and bane for other people.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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