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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Spending time and money on protection of
wildlife
 is more important than spending on human population. From past few decades the human population has grown enormously. In fact, which held to lose of environ and
wildlife
 as well. As humans count is growing, the count of
wildlife
 creatures is slowly eradicating. In my opinion, taking care of
wildlife
 and spending some money for them is absolutely right and there is no harm in it. Because, we have a humans have done lots of damage to the
nature
. In the past, we used to experience many different types of rare
species
, but know their hardly few
species
 which we can count on our finger tips. We cannot go against the
nature
, because we are dependent on
nature
 but
nature
 is not. Though, we have a big forest for
wildlife
, we are losing rare
species
 which cannot be publicly seen. So, developing zoo and spending some money for protection of
wildlife
 helps
further
 generation kids to see those animals. As, we are 90s kids, still we miss lots of wild animals in the zoo.
For example
, blank panther, jaguar these are very rare
species
 and eye feast for many humans.
On the other hand
, pandas are very friendly in
nature they
Accept comma addition
nature, they
 have actually originated from China, but we can see very few in different countries. By taking some measures and actions we have to save our
wildlife
.
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