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in recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping.

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Nowadays, local venders and outlets have stopped their small businesses, since customers prefer to go to shopping malls for their daily buying habits.
This
 essay will discuss both the aspects. On the one hand, buying from small shops is the best idea because there won't be long queues and
shop keeper
Suggestion
the shopkeeper
shopkeeper
 will give the items are decent rates. Because, there is no need to pay a heavy rent to
such
shop
 keepers because they can have a small
shopshop
 in their house too. Local small shops are many and those are keeping more personal touch with customers. On request,
althoughalthough
Suggestion
although although
shop
 is closed, they do reopen it to serve late arriving customer.
On the other hand
, malls are having a wide variety of items, so customers can buy all the needs at one location, by following queues at billing counters.
This
 trend is appreciated by many individuals, which forced small shops to close their outlets. Which is detrimental to the small venders because their bread and butter is at stake. Malls do come up with promotional offers to have discount to attract customers and they do offer referral bonuses. So many are turning heads towards malls. To save small shops, malls should encourage
such
shop
 owners to sell their goods to malls at once and get the greatest profit, which will give some satisfaction to small
shop
 owners. In conclusion, it is the convenience of the customers to prefer malls rather than small shops. But indeed the personal touch provided by small shops is not possible to get from mall owners. Customers should buy fewer items from
small shops
Accept comma addition
small, shops
 too.
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