The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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To begin
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with,
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report provides us with two graphs that give a brief summary
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the relationship between the
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's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the years mentioned.
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, a considerable portion
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both charts is occupied by music,
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literature has got the lowest numbers. If we take a closer look at the pie chart, we can see that
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spending on theatre almost doubled between 1995 and 2005. The
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of people participating in
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event increased, too, but not significantly.
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spending on visual arts suffered a major change – it decreased almost two times,
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the audience experienced only an incremental decline in its numbers. A little increase in the amount of
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spending happened in
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, which fully corresponds to the bigger figures in the bar chart. As to
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music, which is the most popular art form, the
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spent a little less money on it in 2005.
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However
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the
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public attendance here grew by about 30,000 people between 1995 and 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words government with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget allocation
  • noticeable rise
  • sharper increase
  • upward trend
  • distribution
  • participation rates
  • government funding
  • arts events
  • financial commitment
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