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Some people think that music play an important role in society, other think it is just a form of entertainment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Undoubtedly, a topic central to today's debate has revolved around the question whether
music
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 plays an important role in our society, other thinks it's just a species of amusement. Personally, in my viewpoint, I lean towards believing the melody play takes on of the crucial role in our
life
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. On the one hand, there is no room for doubts that
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music is type
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music is a type
 of entertainment, especially energetic
music
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 brings more benefits for pupils. Playing energetic
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 as disco, pop, rock and etc., full of energy and power where charge the people who listen to
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 kind of
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 for a whole entire day. Some of them force you to dance,
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 dance is not of the sport where you can maintain your health and build muscles.
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 dynamic
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 cheers you up when you have bad mood throughout the day and makes
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 easier.
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,
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 play is vital for our race. The
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 thing to note
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 with good quality words always boost human spirit when they get depressed or stressed from the failed exam or interview.
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, right words of the song can shake uncertainty and enhance morale with sign like
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 is not so easy and without hard work you will not success what you have aimed.
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, in order to leave
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 impression as I mentioned above
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 should write by unique people with a wealth of the inner world which really motivates race to do something in their
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 and achieve all goals what have aiming. In conclusion, on the basis of the above-mentioned arguments,
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music
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 play not only a type of amusement in
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,
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 it should be perceived as a source of inspiration and motivation where those items lead to success all humans if we listen attentively all words and will use for right.
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