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Today, education abroad has become more accessible and an increasing number of people send their children to study in other countries. However, this trend has its detractors. I firmly believe that professionals outweigh the cons and we will examine the two below. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the 21st century, it became common to go to another
country
 to
study
,
this
 is easier today, because it has become more accessible. Since the children are young, many parents plan to send them abroad when they grew up. Like everything in life,
this
 has its advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed in
this
 essay. It is indisputable that when a person has the chance to
study
 abroad, it will provide him with several opportunities in the future. Even those who have completed their studies return to their
country
 of origin, have much more to offer in a job opening, which ends up giving you an advantage over other competitors who have never studied in another
country
.
On the other hand
, there is the question about the difficulties that
this
 teenager will face in another
country
. They will be away from family, away from friends, in a strange place, having to speak a language
that is
 not their mother tongue, and having to develop and learn. For these reasons many people who go to live and
study
 abroad, end up not taking it and returning to their
country
 even before completing their studies.
That is
 why the decision to
study
 abroad cannot be made only by the parents, the child or adolescent must be able to express an opinion and participate in
this
 decision. Concluding the act of studying abroad, in another
country it
Accept comma addition
country, it
 has to be the result of a lot of research, conversation and planning. The teenager or child needs to be psychologically prepared while he is still in his
country
,
in addition
 to preparing his communication, his mastery of the foreign language and his emotional. Being away from the family will often be difficult, but if
this
 was a joint decision,
then
 the most correct thing is to focus on the benefits, and the advantages that
this
 experience will bring you in the future.
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