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parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. what do you think is the reason? discuss possible solution and provide examples.

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One of the most conspicuous trend in the 21st century is the difficulty of keeping a life's
work
.It is undoubtedly the case that who to balance their family, which is
also
 affecting the society adversely. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine the possible reasons for
this
 trend and suggest some of the proactive measures that parents could implement to reduce
this
 problem. The
first
 step is to understand why
this
 happening broadly, speaking there are two main reasons for
this
. The
first
 and foremost is to cut throat competitive environment due to
this
 cause it is difficult to survive in the surrounding. Parents want to get succeed in their life and they want to earn more, and fulfil the needs and deed of their children.Parents are doing a part
time
 jobs which create a workload.A good example is that a person who is doctor or accountant have no
time
 to spend with their family and the bonds between the family member are breaking down.Apart from that one of the causes be multitasking.Parents are trying to do their
work
 fast which creates many problems for them.They make promises with their family member, but parents unable to complete it. Which cause the harm for the trust of others towards themselves,
For example
, In France had 35 working hours per week. There is almost certainly no one solution to
this
 problem given the complexity of its causes
.
Accept space
.
However
, one option has to be make general public aware of
time
 management. Parents should create the boundaries between
work
 and the family. Parents should manage the procreating and learn to say no to others. A good example is that at the weekend the parents move outside with their current and spent more
time
 with them and enjoy the moments. In conclusion, there are a variety of different factors that have led to make
this
 problem Worsley. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution of
this
.
This
 could probably solve by parents. They should create a schedule of their
work
 and take a proper
time
 with their family and enjoy with them.
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