Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in an organised group activity in their free time. Others say that group is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves in their own opinion.

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live
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living
in the stiff competitive era; Today, children has more
acthave
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act have
, follow their passion their aims
already fix
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have already fixed
, and they stick
on
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to
one particular path. Apart from
this
, children's life becomes a rat race.
sometimes
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Sometimes
live in competitive phases is beneficial for children or sometimes shows dark side effect.
Nonetheless
, some parents think that'
child
workforce society
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workforce, society
, humility.'
Therefore
, encourage their
child
to taking
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to take
part in the
organisation
or participate in social group
active
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activities
in their free
time
. On one hand,
parents
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parents'
expectation towards
child
has massive; only due to Parent force some
child
connect with social
organisation
for social activities group.
However
,
this
kind of
parents
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parents'
behaviour sometimes shows positive as well as negative impact on their career full
stop
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stop, for
for example
society has
plethora
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a plethora
of activity like cultural professional maybe some children are fed up
from
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with
this
kind of activity. Apparently,
children
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child's
children's
interest may be reduced. On
other hand
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the other hand
, to be part of social
organisation group
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organisation, group
activities is
dream
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dreaming
of some children. Because, they feel responsible, reverence towards society. That's why
children
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children's
activity
particiactivelyparticipates
up in their leisure
time
. Without any educational disturbance
child
utilise t,
heir
of a female
her
time
for the
organisation
. Ian n conclusion, parents should not bother to the children to take a part in any
sial
anything regarded as making something unclean
soil
sale
sail
activities.
However
, parents should provide information about the
organisation
, or an e there their responsibility. Ultimately, children understand there is a possibility and obey the rules. It is inevitable to understand
child
mentally for parents. They should identify
child like
befitting a young child
childlike
and dislike. According to children strength parent, take
decision
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a decision
.
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UT
out
, not the least, parents are
first
teacher
fother
a male parent (also used as a term of address to your father)
father
their
child
. There for, only
Therefore teachers
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Therefore, teachers
to
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of
the
child
what children do in their leisure
time
.
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