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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Internet Social media platforms
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter have significantly affected the livelihood of people. Some instances, the internet and social media have had a negative effect on our social relations and health. In my opinion social media has had more advantages than disadvantages. I will discuss the pros and cons of social media. Social media have connected people faster and cheaper ever than before,
therefore
 they contribute to people’s life in three essential areas: business, science and social relationships.
For example
, a scientist in a developing or an underdeveloped country can easily connect with his or her colleagues in developed countries by using social media They can exchange their knowledge. We could say the same things for business people.
On the other hand
, people often say that social media has a negative effect on their communication. Even though when people get together most people jump on social media.
This
 causes emotional dissatisfaction. The radiation emitted by social media should not be overlooked. The radiation causes cancers and adversely affects the brains of the newborn.
Furthermore
, people who are addicted to social media may have diabetes and other health issues. Students who spend a great deal of their time on social media may have trouble getting good grades in school which may impact their academic success. In conclusion, Even though these advances in technology can damage our social life and health to some degree, In my opinion they yield much more benefits
,
Accept space
,
 in comparison to the downsides internet social media may have .
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