You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter: say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

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Dear sir, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I started a course of

Masters

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in commerce in Canada with the reference of your institute. According to the commitment , the accommodation was provided by you is not appropriate because there are various issues facing

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me as it is very difficult for me to concentrate on

studies

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my studies

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Firstly

, there

are

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lack

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a lack

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of amenities like lighting and

vantilation

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ventilation

and the room is not suitable as I thought before.

Moreover

, my

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roommate

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room mate

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roommate

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also

quite talkative and plays loud music which disturbs me ,

like wise

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, you promised me

for

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a place full of facilities and

seperate

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separate

room for me,

however

, it is not up to the mark,

hence

, I feel fully disappointed by my housing arrangements.

In addition

, I want you to solve

this

problem as soon as possible by

alloting

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allowing

me another space as I mentioned earlier,

otherwise

, kindly refund me the money back , so that, I can manage on my own. Waiting for your prompt service. Yours faithfully, Bhawna Arya

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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174 words

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