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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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The advent of the internet has enabled people to
work
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 remotely from
home
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 rather than commuting daily to
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. Like most new technologies,
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 has some obvious benefits, but
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 some less obvious downsides, and both of these must be assessed. On the positive side, the ability to
work
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 from
home
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 gives a person more freedom. For one thing, they do not have to endure the daily commute, sitting in heavy traffic for hours each
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 as their stress levels rise just to sit in an office all
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.
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, working from
home
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 allows a person to manage their own time.
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, some people like to
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 slowly and steadily, while some people like to
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 in short bursts.
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, in an office environment, people are usually under pressure to make it seem like they are working even if they are not.
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, it is often said that modern society leads to feelings of isolation and working from
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 might exacerbate
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. Having no one around to chat with might actually make people more stressed and have worse effects on their mental health than working in an office. Not to mention, the internet has created a world of distractions that may be hard to resist if someone is sitting in their living room rather than in a cubicle.
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, everyone who has ever tried to organize a conference call knows that face-to-face interactions are normally more time-efficient and productive than trying to communicate remotely. Overall, it seems that working from
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 is a mixed bag. The freedom of not having to come to a certain place to
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 each
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 is appealing, but human’s are social creatures and having everyone in their homes all
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 is probably not the best solution either.
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