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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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The advent of the internet has enabled people to
work
 remotely rather than commuting daily to
work
. Like most new technologies,
this
 has some obvious benefits, but
also
 some less obvious downsides, and both of these must be assessed. On the positive side, the ability to
work
 from home gives a person more freedom. For one thing, they do not have to endure the daily commute, sitting in heavy traffic for hours each
day
 as their stress levels rise just to sit in an
office
 all
day
.
Moreover
, working remotely allows a person to manage their own time.
For example
, some people like to
work
 slowly and steadily, while some people like to
work
 in short bursts.
However
, in an
office
 environment, people are usually under pressure to make it seem like they are working even if they are not.
On the other hand
, it is often said that modern society leads to feelings of isolation and working from home might exacerbate
this
. Having no one around to chat with might actually make people more stressed and have worse effects on their mental health than working in an
office
. Not to mention, the internet has created a world of distractions that may be hard to resist if someone is sitting in their living room rather than in a cubicle.
Furthermore
, everyone who has ever tried to organize a conference call knows that face-to-face interactions are normally more time-efficient and productive than trying to communicate remotely.
Lastly
, working in an
office
 can create a team atmosphere
that is
 better for productivity and the success of the company. To recapitulate, it seems that working from home is a mixed bag. The freedom of not having to come to a certain place to
work
 each
day
 is appealing, but humans are social creatures and having everyone in their homes all
day
 is probably not the best solution either.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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