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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all their courses in foreign countries .While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students. Do you agree or disagree?

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Education is building block or rather foundation for the students to become successful in life. There has been a paradigm shift in decisions of choosing the universities,
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 students prefer to study abroad due to its various reaping benefits.
but
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But
on the contrary
, they have the detrimental effects. Personally, I see eye to eye with the central idea. On one hand, Supporters believe that
there
of them or themselves
their
 evidences significantly proving
supremacy
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the supremacy
 of the foreign courses. With
plethora
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the plethora
a plethora
 of advance researches & more practical approach towards imparting knowledge which native university
lacks which
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lacks, which
 makes foreign university their top choice. There is proven study done by Howard University that reflects
80% increase
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a 80 % increase
 of international students in foreign countries all over the world.
Secondly
, international degree holders are preferred by top organisations around the world evidently, due to their adaptability, communication skills & practical & latest knowhow of
business world
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the business world
.
For example
, researches done by universities like Oxford, Yale & Howard are extensively adopted by top business organisations to improve employee best practices & policies.
On the other hand
, due to
change
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changes
 in the preference of choosing foreign
universities native
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universities, native
 universities are
loosing
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
losing
 their importance as well as
business
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businesses
a business
 which in return leading to brain drain.
For instance
 a student studying from aboard would prefer to work & settle in abroad. Certainly, which has the detrimental effect on
respective country’s economy
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the respective country’s economy
 because
first
 they spend on education & once they start working in
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
 they spend for their in
foreign land
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foreign lands
. So foreign countries have win win situation but not good for
native’s
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native
 country. To summarize, as there are two sides of the coin, studying abroad has that too, albeit for the students it can be fruitful.
However
, the value of education system in their respective country is decreasing. I think
Government
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the Government
 should rework & reform the education system in
such
 way that it stand par with best Universities
.
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.
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