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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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To control violence the whole world had agreed
on
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to
 capital
punishment
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 to reduce the crime rates and to put people’s life at more security.
to
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To
 enable the citizen to walk without worrying about getting killed or threatened to do something,
that is
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not in their desire
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not their desire
.
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however
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However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with the capital
punishment
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 for criminals who attempt specific crimes.
criminals
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Criminals
 should
face
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 the capital
punishment
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 when they have done a specific crime.
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such
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Such
 as killing someone.
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this
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This
 will result for the criminal to
face
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 the capital
punishment
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.
another
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Another
 is if the criminal
have
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has
 a shady past and in the time the mean time the criminal is a person who is armed and is a leader of a Gang in the streets.
Criminal
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The criminal
A criminal
 should not
face
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 the capital
punishment
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 as everyone deserves a
second
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 chance.
the
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The
 criminal may give up on
what’s
what thing
what
 he/she is doing.
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in
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In
 addition the criminal may turn up to be good for the society and help in stopping the crimes
with
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in
 the country.
However
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, there are some religions that
requires
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require
 the criminals
to be
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be
 dead.
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in
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In
 addition, the criminal may be following that specific
religion
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 and still committed the crime.
which
Suggestion
Which
 means that the criminal will have to
face
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 the capital
punishment
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.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, the criminal will be sent to a court that follows the rules of that specific
religion
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.
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on
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On
 the other hand, the criminal might not be the type that can explain the truth
on
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in
 court, because hearing about the capital
punishment
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 may make the criminal nervous. The word capital
punishment
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 may make a lot of people nervous and reduce their ability to explain more about the situation.
in
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In
 conclusion, the criminal have to
face
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 the capital
punishment
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 because of
religion
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matters which
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matters, which
 is a must for the criminal to follow their
religion
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 rules.
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in
Suggestion
In
 addition, is because of specific crimes
such
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 as killing a person without any reason.
these
Suggestion
These
 are all reasons of why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with the capital
punishment
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.
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