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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Nowadays, it
is gained
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has gained
is gaining
gains
 popularity in some countries that people are encouraged to
work
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 or
travel
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 for a year between at graduation period of high
school
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. That provides advantageous and
disadventages
constituting a disadvantage
disadvantageous
disadvantages
 for
young
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the younger
 student. İn
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 essay, it will discuss both sides.
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, travelling could broaden young generation their mind because meeting different culture and people will give them unprecedented experience.
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, If the youth
travel
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 to different countries before graduating
at
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in
 high
school
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, they are likely to gain various perspectives. İn fact, they will have a chance to observe people who do not think like them, which could help them to understand
human being
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the human being
human beings
a human being
.
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 to
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, working
at
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in
on
 different areas might increase humans’ creativities.
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, If
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an individual
the individual
individuals
 who will study
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in
 agriculture area
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of
 university
work
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on
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in
software field
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the software field
, he/she may use his/her knowledge which obtained from both
area
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areas
.
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, those things probably influence their future career.
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, some young student may not completely harmonize while they try to
work
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 or
travel
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at
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in
graduation period
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the graduation period
 of high
school
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. It is likely that they are not ready adult’s life, taking more responsibilities.
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, when people choose to leave their home for seeing new places for the
first
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 time. They could confront with a lot of difficulties
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 as burglary or threats because they should not know out of their hometown, and adopting
new culture
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a new culture
 or places is not likely to be easier. For
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reasons
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reason
, those issues could not be advantageous for young generations. To sum up, there are advantageous and
disadventages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantageous
 for young people who are encouraged to
work
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 or
travel
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at
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in
graduation period
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the graduation period
 of high
school
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. If student are keen to take new adventure, they should try to experience those before graduating university

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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