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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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According to a study, the average weight of people is increasing in
few countries
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a few countries
, which is, in turn, reducing their stamina and immunity levels. Overweight is always a problem and overweight causes numerous diseases and reduces the fitness. A healthy human body on an average needs 2000 calories per day. Anymore added calories can cause more harm than good. There are few causes which contribute to
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 problem.
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, the type of
foods
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food
 intake and more advancement in technology is resulting in processed
food
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, which is high in sugar and salt levels. Ready to eat foods like chips, cheese would cause more damage to our digestion system.
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, in few countries like India, people eat
food
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 at once in large amount
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 of eating it in instalments.
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 habit would result
in digestion
a disorder of digestive function characterized by discomfort or heartburn or nausea
indigestion
 problems.
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, proper intake of water is another important factor that many people simply ignore. It is said that 3 litres of water per day can avoid any digestion problems.
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, lack of exercise: many people, especially in corporate cultures, spend most of their time in front of the desk. Due to these highly pressurised jobs, they find very less time to take
walk
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walks
 for at least 10 minutes.
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 of these reasons, a healthy person becomes obese. These causes can be counter measured by following a proper
diet which
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diet, which
 includes all
food
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 categories like fruits, vegetables, meats
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 of
readymade
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ready made
food
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, hydrating our body across the whole day. And
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, walking should be induced in our daily routine for at least 30 minutes. It is said that "Prevention is better than cure ".Though we have time constraints with our busy
schedules we
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schedules, we
 have to balance between our routine and health

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