Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Advertisements
Suggestion
The advertisements
has been one of the most used technique by business owners when it comes to selling their products in the market. Some of us end up buying
stuffs
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stuff
that we don't need. But others find it useful when it comes to discovering new products that can improve their lives. Living in the era where most people are greatly influenced by social media. Popular individuals
uses
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use
this
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flatform
a raised horizontal surface
platform
to advertise stuffs.
For instance
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,
last
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year one known
influencer
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
in social media advertises
this
Linking Words
limited edition watch. As expected
large crowd
Suggestion
a large crowd
lined up for it and buy
this
Linking Words
watch even if they do not need it. People tend to impulsively buy things, they buy the product not because they need
it but
Accept comma addition
it, but
for the love
to
Suggestion
for
of
the person endorsing it. I believe that there is nothing wrong with purchasing stuffs
that is
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being advertised by our
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
.
Accept space
.
As long as we put our needs
first
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and know how to balance our needs and wants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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