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Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #research #environment
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Nowadays, environmental and medical problems are spreading, and some people believe that the government should give more investment in medical researches rather than environmental researches.
However
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, the field of
medicine
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 vital to saving
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
 health, I think researches on the environment gives more positive effects to green
nature
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 and humans. On the one hand, taking action on the field of
medicine
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 allows curing different diseases and saving more lives of people who are terminally eel.
For instance
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, just five days before Russia was able to treat all people who are suffering from the virus of COVID-19 by using billions of
us
of or belonging to us
our
 dollars to find a vaccine.
Besides
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medicine
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 needs much money, people have no option to live without it
because in all parts
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because all parts
 of the world have people who are terminally eel and for saving their lives, doctors have to do researches. Whereas t I do not agree with it.
On the other
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hand problems
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hand, problems
 of mother
nature
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 as global warming, climate change is should be the most important for government.
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Nature
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The nature
 of the earth
is going
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goes
 into
darkness
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darker
 day by day by the actions of humans. Due to the global warming ice caps in the arctic is melting, by acid rain, we lose many species of animals and species, and that causes hundred billions of people dying from diseases like malaria, fatal diseases,
choleroid
any compound containing a chlorine atom
chloride
 and others. So that researches environment saves
nature
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, and helps to avoid diseases, and increasing life expectancy of all parts of
nature
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 as well as humans. In conclusion, like
medicine
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, the environment is the most important for saving the world and life of humans.
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