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it is better to go out for a live performances ( show or concert ) than stay at home watching Tv or using the computer to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Back in the 1990s, going out to live concerts was trending among the youngsters,
however
, nowadays many prefer to watch it on TV or computer while staying home comfortable. Owing to the plethora amount of benefits, I mostly agree with the idea of staying home and watching the shows on your tv or computer.
To begin
 with, following your favourite show from home is the not only cosy but
also
 an economical solution
as
Suggestion
at
 the price of the tickets to the concert of famous personalities is often skyrocketing. Going out for a show comes with numerous costs, including travelling and lodging which, according to many is not a wise investment for a watching your star for a couple of hours.
For example
, tickets for the live performance by Eminem, the famous rap star, at the Melbourne arena were available at upwards of 2000 dollars which is extravagant. Fortifying
further
, you seldom get the chance to get a better look at the performer due to the fact that a concert is generally overly crowded and if you are standing afar from the stage where the artist perform
then
 ultimately you have to rely on the big LCD screens that constantly live feed the performance, which is no different from watching it from your TV, but only it lacks the cosiness and amenities of your couch.
Lastly
, at a show you do not get the privilege of pausing or forwarding any act unlike TV or computers and you have to wait for hours for the performance you come for in the
first
 place. To conclude,
although
 going out and watching your dearest artist performing live does seems to be a fun activity,
however
, it is not always the case and even after spending a large chunk of money you do not get the experience that you desired for that leaves you disheartened.
Submitted by Ramanjeet Singh on

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