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Now a days, public transport is used across the world to counter traffic problems. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In many parts of the globe, government own
transportation
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 services are often used as a mode of reducing traffic concerns.
Although
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 many minds think
otherwise
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, I completely side with the fact that public
transportation
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 usage is a positive development. Not only because these services are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly and
cost
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effective but
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effective, but
also
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 because public
transport
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 can effectively reduce private vehicles on roads.
This
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 essay will explore how these mega merits make
usage
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use
 of public
transportation
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 a positive development.
Firstly
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, Common known
transportation
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 services can effectively reduce pollution levels within a
megacity
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. As Public
transport
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 facilitates commuters
to travel
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travel
together resulting
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together, resulting
 in the reduction of pollution from private vehicle. Take an example of Sydney,
Australia where
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Australia, where
 the introduction of
public tram system
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a public tram system
the public tram system
 has reduced the pollution levels in the city centre.
Thus
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,
general public
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the general public
 will definitely prefer public
transport
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 for future environmental protection.
Secondly
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, public
transportation
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 services are generally considered as extremely
cost
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 effective. As mass
transportation
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 offers the luxury to pay a lot lesser for travelling.
For instance
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, a survey conducted in Berlin, Germany, revealed that the travelling
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cost
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costs
 of commuters
have reduced
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has reduced
 significantly owing to the introduction of
intracity
traveling between cities
intercity
 train manuals.
Hence
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, public
transport
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 regains a positive image for
general public
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the general public
.
Finally
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, Common known
transport
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 services are helpful in reducing the number of private vehicles on the roads. As mass commuting on public
transport
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 definitely reduces private cars on the roads effectively reducing traffic jams and highway blockages. To sum up my belief, the usage of public
transport
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 is extremely beneficial not only in terms of reducing private
vehicles but
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vehicles, but
also
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, in terms of paying a
cost
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 effective way of protecting
environment
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the environment
.

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