The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

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In recent decades, the number of children with obesity has increased dramatically because more and more children choose to lead a sedentary lifestyle. In my opinion,

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regard spending more time on sport and exercise as one of the best ways in order to teach children.

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with, a wide range of ways

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can be implemented

to reverse

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trend.The most effective approach comes from the right attitude of individuals themselves.

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children should actively refrain from spending excessive amounts of time on the distractions by,

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, setting a daily limit on watching television and committing to the goal.

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, parents need to take more responsibility for their children's health. To be more specific, junk food and fizzy drink should not be on their daily menu.

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, parents

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to feed their children nutritious food and encourage them to play outdoor

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, the campaigns organised by schools can be the best idea in

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to tackle about the overweight. Students will be familiar with the causes of

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epidemic situation.

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children's

comprehension. To sum up, everyone whose weight is above normal must be encouraged to combat

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problem.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

225 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
physical education
teamwork
discipline
nutrition education
healthy eating habits
balanced meals
junk food
parental involvement
community initiatives
fitness programs
government policies
subsidies
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The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many societies, there is less social contact between the elderly and the young. What are the reasons and what measures can be taken?

In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Some people believe that professional workers such as Doctors and Teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent Do you Agree or Disagree? TASK 2

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.