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The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

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In recent decades, the number of children with obesity has increased dramatically because more and more children choose to lead a sedentary lifestyle. In my opinion, I regard spending more time on sport and exercise as one of the best ways in order to teach children.Other suggestions, I will discuss in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, a wide range of ways can be implemented to reverse
this
 trend.The most effective approach comes from the right attitude of individuals themselves.
First
, children should actively refrain from spending excessive amounts of time on the distractions by,
for instance
, setting a daily limit on watching television and committing to the goal.Another measure, which can be taken by municipal  authorities, is to invest in constructing sports complexes and public parks in local areas.If
this
 plan is launched, residents can gain easy access to sport and exercise areas, thereby becoming more involved in physical activity.
Second
, parents need to take more responsibility for their children's health. To be more specific, junk food and fizzy drink should not be on their daily menu.
Also
, parents need to feed their children nutritious food and serve healthy home cooked meals as well as encourage them to play outdoor activities.
Last but not least
Suggestion
The last but not least
, the campaigns organised by schools can be the best idea in order to tackle about the overweight. Students will be familiar with the causes of
this
 epidemic situation.
Therefore
,
this
 activity can be a source of information related to
this
 problem.
In addition
,
this
 campaign must include some questions and answers games to check children's comprehension. To sum up, everyone whose weight is above normal must be encouraged to combat
this
 problem. A combination of individuals' actions and the right investment from the authorities could make a difference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • physical education
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • nutrition education
  • healthy eating habits
  • balanced meals
  • junk food
  • parental involvement
  • community initiatives
  • fitness programs
  • government policies
  • subsidies
  • multi-dimensional approach
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