.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package

#job #friend #•describe #reason #•show #excitement #•say #salary #package

Dear Tajinder, I hope you are doing great. I'm writing

this

letter to inform you that I am starting a new job at Toronto at Proactive company and my position is human resource generalist. I started my work

last

week which is really exciting for me. Let me explain to you the reason for resigning from

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previous job.

Although

I had a good salary at my

last

warehouse where the environment was not so friendly. Most of the workers demotivated other employees and there was no increase in the incentives from the

last

two years.

Therefore

, I decided to change my work and find a better opportunity. I'm very excited about the current role as it is my passion to hire individuals

according to

their skills and

also

got 70,000$ annualy package which is far better than the

last

one. I'll give you the treat and we meet soon

this

weekend. Best wishes, Love

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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6 paragraphs

155 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved.

Directors of organizations receive higher salaries than the ordinary worker, some people think it is necessary while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse to what extent do you agree or disagree

Private car ownership has been increasing over the past few decades. This has given ordinary people greater mobility, but has also led to concerns about traffic congestion and air pollution. Do the advantages of private car ownership outweigh the disadvantages?