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Nowadays people are affected by social media and the internet. Is it a good or a bad trend in your opinion?Explain it by giving your own example.

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In the 21st century, people are heavily influenced by the internet and social networking sites
this
 influence may be positive in terms to access to information while I agree that social media have a bigger negative impact. They make people inert. On the one hand, technology has benefited people in many ways. The internet and social sites facilitate dissemination of any news or information
rapidly
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rapidly, for
for
example social
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example, social
 media can help students in learning essential skills the most common positive impact of social media was that it allowed kids to stay in touch with past and present friends. Through the changes in their lives.
On the other hand
, the significant impact that these sites have on people is that young individuals who spend an excessive amount of time on web surfing became depressed and isolated from their family
initially
 individuals enjoy
this
 habit.
However with
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However, with
 the passage of time they became addicted which leads isolation. It is clear that social media have a negative shock on both people and society as they lead to isolation among individuals. But social media
also
 allows for speedy communication.
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