Today people are surrounded by advertising. This both affects what people think is important and is a negative impact on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertistment
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Advertisement
invades almost every facet of our life. Many people believe that it is slowly corrupting our moral values and negatively affect everyone's lives.
However
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, I disagree with
such
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sentiment and believe that advertising overall brings more goods than harm.
To begin
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with, advertising is an important condition for a healthy
consumer
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market. It
serve
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serves
as a way for customer to discover new
product
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and differentiate products from each branch. In other word, it
empower
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empowers
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consumer
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consumers
the consumer
with more knowledge of the
product
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they brought so that they can make an educated choice.
On
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In
To
By
constrast
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
, in a market without advertising,
consumer
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tends to stick to one brand, probably the brand that the store manager decided to put on top of the shelf. In consequence,
this
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will create a monopoly situation in which the largest brand
just pay
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just pays
the store for a better shelf position
instead
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of innovating their
product
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. In
this
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sense, advertising is beneficial to every
consumer
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because it
encourage
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encourages
brands to
imporve
to make better
improve
their
product
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.
Although
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it is partly true that
advertisting
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
shift our value towards consumerism, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
the effect is over exaggerated and can be
remedy
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remedied
through various means
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as regulation and education. It is undeniable that
advertisments
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisements
create a sense of
urge
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urgency
to buy things
that is
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unecessary
not necessary
unnecessary
necessary
.
However
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, nowadays, thanks to education and parenting, most people have become aware of these negative psychological effects.
As a result
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, we are, to an extent, building up
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an
immunity
toward
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to
it.
In addition
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,
government agency
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a government agency
have been
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has been
had been
conscientious on establishing regulation to ban many
predetory
characterized by plundering or pillaging or marauding
predatory
advertistments
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisements
. All in all, the negative impacts of
advertistment
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
are largely dissolved. In conclusion,
advertistment
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
perform
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performs
an important duty in our
consumer
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society.
Althought
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Although
it comes with some drawbacks, overall the benefit overbalance the potential harm.
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