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At present, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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Youngsters constitute a larger proportion of
populace
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the populace
 in some countries compared to elderly. It is mainly beneficial as the youth is a main working force compared to few disadvantages it might have. Young adults comprise a greater proportion of
population
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 compared to the elderly has many advantages.
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, they constitute the main working force of a
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society contributing
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society, contributing
 towards its prosperity. So a greater number of working heads will mean a greater working force. The elderly people are in fact a load on the economy of a
country
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 as the government has to pay a handsome amount of money for their pensions and provide shelter for the old age homes, while they contribute nothing towards the development of a
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,
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, proving themselves a burden on the economy.
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, a greater proportion of young people are advantageous for the community.
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Nevertheless despite
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Nevertheless, despite
 the advantages above, there may be a few disadvantages of higher youth
population
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. The young people become involved in criminal activities which destroys the law and order situation of a
country
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 while mostly the law abiding citizens are elderly people.
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, the greater
population
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 of elderly would mean more unrest situation in a state,
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, it will be difficult to manage
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 a
country
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. Another possible benefit of elderly people may be their vast experience in life which can be proven useful to the
society
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. These seasoned people can be utilised as excellent teachers, economist and scientist and their life experiences can be benefit a
society
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. In conclusion, the energetic youth
population
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 can play a pivotal role in upbringing of
society
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 compared to senior citizens who even require people to take care of themselves.
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