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space exploration is much too expensive and money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#space #exploration #money
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Thanks to our curiosity and technological advancements, we have achieved tremendous progress in
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 research. Some people feel that since
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 exploration is too expensive, we should abandon it and
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 spend that money on other things. I don’t quite agree with
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 view. I admit that
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 research is
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expensive, but
 in my opinion, the benefits are worth the money. To start with, there are several mysteries about
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. If we can solve even some of them, that will be a tremendous achievement for us. It could even make our planet safer. We are already using satellites to forecast weather. Weather predictions have saved countless lives from natural disasters like storms and floods. Our planet is just one of the millions of planets in
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 and it has already become a crowded place. If we can find other habitable planets, that will solve the burning issue of overpopulation on earth. Scientists are already exploring the possibility of sending people to Mars. If we can colonize Mars, it will be the biggest achievement in the history of
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the human race
. Alien life is another thing that interests ordinary people and scientists alike. There are numerous films on
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 subject. While it is true that we still have no conclusive evidence of aliens, learning more about them will definitely help us to stay better prepared against possible attacks from them. To conclude, our planet is nothing more than a speck in the vast universe. By learning more and more about
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, we can better understand our position in the universe and
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, I don’t agree with the argument that money should be spent on other areas because
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 research is too expensive
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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