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Money is the only reason why people work hard. Do you disagree or agree.

#money #reason #people #work
It is sometimes argued that salary is the only reason of working hard, while it is true to a certain extent,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that there are other that draw people to
work
 harder. On the one hand, it is
undenied
not precisely limited, determined, or distinguished
undefined
underneath
 that
money
 plays an important role in our daily
lives we
Accept comma addition
lives, we
 all need
money
 to cover basis needs, pay for hobbies or dwell the ourselves and no one aspect of these can
done
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do
 without
money
.
For example
, In some countries,
such
 as Japan, Korean where a fixed amount of
money
 is paid per unit of
work
 which leads employees
work
 so hard.
Moreover
, the
work
 with high salary will attract more employees to apply.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 elements which encourage people to toil
such
 as the pleasure of
work
 and job satisfaction. Volunteer works are the finest example that
show
Suggestion
shows
 people not only
work
 for earning
living
Suggestion
a living
, but some other meaningful reasons. They just want to contribute something positive to society.
Additionally
, there are many people like young doctors who travel to undeveloped countries to cure patients b receiving
lower salary
Suggestion
lower salaries
a lower salary
 than in their own countries. Via working in other countries can improve their skills in their fields and get good reputation when returning their countries.
Therefore
, experience and unabated enthusiasm are what make people want to
work
 hard
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion, while salaries
is
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are
 pivotal key to encourage more hard-working employees, I completely believe that there are other reasons affecting worker's attitude in working.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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