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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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When to start learning a foreign
language
 has been a contentious issue amongst some academicians.
As a result
, some
educationists
 have argued that it is helpful to introduce a foreign
language
 in elementary
school
 than in high
school
. I believe the benefits associated with learning a new
language
 in
primary level
Suggestion
the primary level
 of education surpass the drawbacks. A potential effect of learning a new
language
 in primary
school
 is that the children may confuse the foreign
language
 and their native dialect. The implication of
this
 is that it may delay the development of speaking their mother tongue fluently. A case in time was that of a German
child
 who learned and spoke Spanish very
well but
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well, but
 could not speak nor understand the German
language
. A
further
 downside is that adding a new
language
 to a
school
 curriculum may be burdensome on children.
This
 is due to the fact that elementary
school
 children already have many subjects to learn and a new
language
 could make the syllabus more
tasky
any piece of work that is undertaken or attempted
task
tasty
tasks
. Having said that, one obvious benefit of learning a new
language
 early in life is that it helps a
child
 to gain a higher level of proficiency and fluency. In today's fast-paced world, being bilingual or multilingual could open doors of opportunities to foreign education or lucrative jobs in international organizations.
Therefore
, a
child
's fluency in his native tongue does not guarantee career success and
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 of dreams. What is more, learning an additional
language
 enhances a
child
's cognitive skills. Research has shown that multilingual people are smarter than monolingual people. Albert Einstein spoke five languages and he is undoubtedly one of the greatest minds on earth. In conclusion, while learning a new
language
 early could hamper the fluency of the mother tongue and could be an extra burden on children. The usefulness of being multilingual, its confidence, and opportunities pale a great
significance
Suggestion
significantly
signifies
signify
 more than the flaws.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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